Monday, July 31, 2006

Chehre

Rat ki sookhi khamoshi jab bahein pasare chale aayi
sath din bhar ki kayi yadein bhi le aayi
Aur... laayi hain unke sath kai chehre

chehre
Jindagi se jujhte
juthi muskurahaton se bhare
anjan manjilon ko dhundhte
Aur... raston main tanha bhatakte

vahi kuch aur
atmavishwas se bhare
nayi manjilein dhoondhte
safaltaon ki sidiyan chadte
Aur...kabhi na ghabrate

kuch aur bhi
har pal zindagi ko jite hue
har ek pal ko poojte hue
Bin kuch khwab aur aashayein
Aur...lakshyaheen jivan ko aage le jate

In chehron mein
apna mukhauta nakami ke saath talashta hun

kyonki har din mere jine ke dhang badal jate hain
mere andaj aur mere rang badal jate hain
aaj main ek chehra hun aur kal koi doosra
jaise shatranj ki bisat pe bicha hua ek mohra

10 comments:

Anonymous said...

concept is good.... but there is scope for improvement in language... :-)

Anonymous said...

nice thought and a good finishing.

Anonymous said...

bahut fundoo sound kar raha hai.. problem is my understanding of poems is a little less when i read it... so when i m back u cud read it to me and then I would tell u how much i understand!! :-)

Abhik said...

Saurabh,
Frankly speaking, this sounds good enough to be sung. Seriously! Dreamy yet realistic, I like the faint melancholy of the poem.

Anonymous said...

I couldn't get why you have compared the chehre with
jaise shatranj ki bisat pe bicha hua ek mohra

Madhusudan

Saurabh said...

Madhu dear,

Satranj ki bisaat pe biche hue kai mohre(Like us) just change their faces (say pawn becomes knight once he reaches @other end)once they reach to other end.....here i am tring to compare from that analogy :-)

Love,
Saurabh

Anonymous said...

your anology was too complicated
So what i get is that people change when they achieve something
right

Madhusudan

Saurabh said...

Dear Madhu,

It's always not the case...YES people do change when they get something,sometimes but here I am trying to convey the gist of Aims,moods and ambience on the behaviour and personality of the SAME person.I hope this clears your doubts.

Love,
Saurabh

Anonymous said...

good effort with appreciable outcome in hindi poem writing...
conveying complicated thoughts and meaningful emotions..through sort of conversation....any one is genuine if takes some time to comprehend...

Shreya said...

gud one .....personification of the feelings is very nice . ek aisi tasveer jo har insaan dekhta hai aur apne apne tareeke se interpret karta hai,nice !!!!